comm_net.txt:2: Letter to the Editor, Times-Star, Middletown, CA and Clearlake Observer, Clearlake, CA, January, 1996 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Community networks (Free-Nets) are an [attempt -> try] to use computer network technology to address the needs of the community.
comm_net.txt:9: A major part of that effort is spent making computing facilities available to everybody in a community, especially [people -> Do not use with numbers or as substitute for "public".] without ready access to the technology.
comm_net.txt:12: With a strong sense of community responsibility, [most -> Do not use as substitute for "almost."] community network developers insist on the utopian ideal that the services be provided without charge.
comm_net.txt:19: [While -> (if used as substitute for "and, but" then replace by semicolon, do not use as substitute for "although" as it leads to ambiguity or absurdity, best use it only in the sense of "during the time that")] virtually all community network systems do offer access to at least some Internet services (e-mail at a minimum), the focus of a community network is on the local community.
comm_net.txt:21: Other access that [can -> (do not confuse with "may")] be provided are FTP (File Transfer Protocol), telnet (directly using remote computers), and Gopher (searching and reading on-line information on remote computers).
comm_net.txt:24: Some Community Networks offer a Web interface to the world and [can -> (do not confuse with "may")] allow limited World Wide Web browsing to [it's -> = "it is" or "its"?] users through a text interface.
comm_net.txt:28: Community Networks [currently -> Often redundant: This program is currently checking your document.] rely chiefly on volunteers to run them, usually organized into committees.
comm_net.txt:29: It is important to maintain high levels of unpaid volunteer participation, even [while -> (if used as substitute for "and, but" then replace by semicolon, do not use as substitute for "although" as it leads to ambiguity or absurdity, best use it only in the sense of "during the time that")] some aspects of the operation [may -> = Do not confuse with "can".] need paid professionals.
comm_net.txt:31: Many networks are run by independent non-profit organizations, [while -> (if used as substitute for "and, but" then replace by semicolon, do not use as substitute for "although" as it leads to ambiguity or absurdity, best use it only in the sense of "during the time that")] others are under organizations [like -> Substitute by "as" before phrases or clauses: Our love was beautiful, as love was meant to be.] universities, libraries, or government agencies.
comm_net.txt:35: It is essential to [ensure -> (use "assure" with people, "ensure" with things, and "insure" when talking about money)] equal access to information and the infrastructure of government.
comm_net.txt:37: Although libraries make ideal candidates, [they -> (do not use as substitute for "each, each one, everybody, every one, anybody, any one, somebody, some one")] are under continual economic pressure and [may -> = Do not confuse with "can".] not have the resources available for the project.
comm_net.txt:39: Universities generally are strong proponents of Free-Nets although [there is -> (a dead phrase; rewrite the sentence and it will probably improve)] some reluctance to get involved in community work within higher education.
comm_net.txt:45: I am willing to participate in this project as a technical adviser and consultant, and in any other way I [can -> (do not confuse with "may")].
comm_net.txt:49: M.A.C.'s interests lie [along the line of -> like (or omit)] Middletown becoming an "Electronic Village" with the goal of putting Middletown merchants and citizens on the Internet and promoting the "soft" industry of small computer-oriented businesses to increase our economic base and provide more jobs.
comm_net.txt:60: In addition, information from both the [State -> (if used as a verb, restrict to the meaning of "express fully or clearly")] and Federal governments is available on-line for access by all citizens as well as libraries and other community organizations.
comm_net.txt:62: [One -> When used as a pronoun, it must be used consistently: One must manage one's money carefully.] local Free-Net in Ukiah is sponsored by the County Library [system -> Frequently used without need.] (mailto:
[email protected] ) and is [very -> (use sparingly; try to use words that are strong in themselves for emphasis)] active with over a thousand members.
comm_net.txt:66: Computer networks, unlike traditional media, provide the opportunity for many-to-many communication, since [they -> (do not use as substitute for "each, each one, everybody, every one, anybody, any one, somebody, some one")] are a two-way street.
comm_net.txt:67: This opens up immense possibilities for increased political participation by all [people -> Do not use with numbers or as substitute for "public".], both the economic haves and have-nots.
comm_net.txt:71: Some of the aspects of community that [can -> (do not confuse with "may")] be placed on-line include information on arts and crafts fairs and classes, writing workshops, local dance and theater events, homework hotlines, parent's forums, on- line education, e-mail to local government agencies and District Supervisors, Board agendas and public meeting schedules, forums on local issues, legal documents from government on-line, social services information, job listings, forums for unemployed workers, library catalogs on-line, ethnic and [alternative -> Alternative refers to choosing the other of two possibilities. Alternate refers to another element of a set, without connoting choice.] newspapers, letters to the editors of newspapers, and civic journalism projects.
comm_net.txt:82: [They -> (do not use as substitute for "each, each one, everybody, every one, anybody, any one, somebody, some one")] also need funding for [ongoing -> (avoid)] development, office facilities, and staffing.
comm_net.txt:84: [There is -> (a dead phrase; rewrite the sentence and it will probably improve)] some foundation support and government funding is also available.
comm_net.txt:87: If community networks are going to become a community resource, [they -> (do not use as substitute for "each, each one, everybody, every one, anybody, any one, somebody, some one")] need a more reliable form of continuing funding.
comm_net.txt:90: Public funding, just as for libraries, public parks, and schools, [may -> = Do not confuse with "can".] also be necessary.
comm_net.txt:93: Tom Grundner of the National Public Telecommunications Network likens free public computing to free public libraries, saying, "I [can -> (do not confuse with "may")]'t envision a 21st century without free public computing" Community networks [could -> (do not confuse with "may")] become a cornerstone of that vision, but [will -> (shall is sometimes used with first person pronouns and the future tense. It expresses something you believe will happen, not something that you are determined to do. A drowning man shouts: "I shall drown, no one will save me!")] [only -> Put "only" right before the word it modifies.] happen if [people -> Do not use with numbers or as substitute for "public".] work to make it happen.
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