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Jonah and the Whaling - MMSA story by DMK and Skip Trace |
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By: David M. Katz Date: March 11, 2025, 12:28 am |
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https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=58047 |
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So, this past Wednesday, a thought of a story came to me. Hence |
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the reason this story is set on a Wednesday. |
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A boy has an argument with his dad and something happens and he |
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feels bad about it and he seeks out a spanking for it. |
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Yes, that is simple, but, if I tell much of anything then there |
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would be spoilers. |
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I decided to myself, "Hey, Self, this would make a nice quick |
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short story." Those of you who have been around me a while know |
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to run when I decide I am going to write a "short" story. Z, the |
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last one was what, 32,000 words? |
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I got in to the thing and it was flowing well - too well. I had |
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almost 3000 words written and had not even got to a major plot |
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point much less a transition point to a spanking. Self said, |
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"OK, well, it will just be a tad longer than a short. You can |
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clean some of the extraneous stuff up in editing." I was |
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enjoying the process and chugging along. I had everything where |
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I wanted it, or so I thought, and was ready to transition to the |
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spanking. Hello, brick wall. |
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I reached out to my friend and fellow author and the guy who |
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proofs and edits for me (everyone needs someone to proof and |
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edit for them), Skip Trace. "Hey, I got this story. I am ready |
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to spank the kid, but I can't get around the corner, you got any |
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ideas?" He agreed to look at it and came back with some |
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beautiful text that went places I didn't even think about going. |
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"Thanks, Skip! Let me credit you as a collaborating author." He |
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says, "Not necessary." I am not feeling too good about this so I |
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get him to agree to come on board as a collaborator. I say, |
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"Since your name is going to be on it, why don't you go through |
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it and work your magic." |
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Skip thought of ideas I could have never thought of and polished |
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up some rough edges for me. The finished product had definitely |
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become OUR story and looked nothing like a short story - mainly |
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because it is almost 10,000 words long. |
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I love this story. I love how Jonah fights with his conscience. |
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I love a story about a good boy who needs to be reigned in just |
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a little. I love loving families and I love stories about |
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brothers. |
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For those who are curious "whaling" does have an archaic slang |
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meaning: "Whaling" in slang means to beat someone forcefully or |
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repeatedly, essentially meaning to hit someone hard and |
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continuously; it's often used in phrases like "whale on someone" |
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or "whale the tar out of someone." It has been used colloquially |
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in places, esp., the American South as a euphemism for spanking. |
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My protagonist's name was Jonah so what better title? |
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Please give this one a look. Thanks! |
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Many thanks to Skip for his support and input! |
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Re: Jonah and the Whaling - MMSA story by DMK and Skip Trace |
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By: afinch Date: March 11, 2025, 7:45 am |
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Great story. Highly recommended. |
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