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| Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: Jack Date: December 1, 2019, 7:02 am | |
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| I wanted to say a few things about this serial at the start. | |
| First of all, I'm no longer calling it the Advent Calendar. The | |
| original idea of the advent calendar was for many different | |
| artists to write short stories set around the holiday season. | |
| Kat ran things at first, but he has to back out after a couple | |
| of years. I tried to continue the same idea, but it became | |
| harder and harder to come up with that many ideas for different | |
| stories. | |
| I was considering giving up the concept all together, when it | |
| hit me that maybe we could use those 25 days to tell one story, | |
| which led to Wil and I writing A New Family. The year after | |
| that, several of us did a group of stories centered around | |
| families in one neighborhood. Even then, organizing several | |
| different authors to work in a shared universe like that proved | |
| difficult, so the past couple of years, I wrote my own stories, | |
| sometimes punctuated by other authors telling their own stories. | |
| While I like to think both The Christmas Pageant and A Club Red | |
| Christmas stand on their own and have their own tones, there | |
| were some thematic similarities (which is to be expected from | |
| holiday stories centered around spanko kids). | |
| This year, I wanted to do something different. | |
| It Happened One Christmas has changed a lot from how I first | |
| envisioned it, but it's very different from the past couple of | |
| years as well. It's a darker story, but one that takes | |
| inspiration from some classic Christmas stories. | |
| If it does seem a bit heavy, especially at first, I hope you'll | |
| stick with it. | |
| Thanks to all for reading, | |
| Jack | |
| #Post#: 16167-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: Zyngaru Date: December 1, 2019, 8:18 am | |
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| [quote author=Jack link=topic=1593.msg16165#msg16165 | |
| date=1575205358] | |
| It Happened One Christmas has changed a lot from how I first | |
| envisioned it, but it's very different from the past couple of | |
| years as well. It's a darker story, but one that takes | |
| inspiration from some classic Christmas stories. | |
| If it does seem a bit heavy, especially at first, I hope you'll | |
| stick with it. | |
| Thanks to all for reading, | |
| Jack | |
| [/quote] | |
| I like heavy. Dark is good also. Sometimes Christmas stories | |
| tend to be too sweet. I love how you started this story. | |
| Straight to the paddling. | |
| There are just a couple things you might wish to edit, if you | |
| can that is. There is the dreaded "****" at the beginning of | |
| one of the paragraphs. | |
| "The paddle **** down a third time, again, slightly lower, but | |
| still overlapping." I inserted the word, "came," but I don't | |
| see how the censor wouldn't allow that word. Of course so many | |
| other words could have been meant. "flashed," "dropped," and | |
| etc. But nothing that I would have censored came to mind. | |
| And then there is the "et"? It is in a line about 1/4 of the | |
| way down. | |
| "Bailey stared at his et, but there was nothing he could say." | |
| I tried to think of what he was staring at, but couldn't come up | |
| with anything. | |
| Not criticisms, just two things I saw as I was reading. | |
| I loved the first chapter and can't wait for the next one. | |
| Thank you so much for writing this. When you had said you | |
| weren't doing the Christmas Advent stories anymore, I was | |
| disappointed, because I do look forward to reading your stories. | |
| You have brightened my Holiday season, by doing this. | |
| #Post#: 16170-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: Adric Date: December 1, 2019, 1:19 pm | |
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| [quote author=Zyngaru link=topic=1593.msg16167#msg16167 | |
| date=1575209919] | |
| And then there is the "et"? It is in a line about 1/4 of the | |
| way down. | |
| "Bailey stared at his et, but there was nothing he could say." | |
| I tried to think of what he was staring at, but couldn't come up | |
| with anything.[/quote] | |
| I think Bailey's "et" was his "feet". | |
| [quote author=Zyngaru link=topic=1593.msg16167#msg16167 | |
| date=1575209919] | |
| There is the dreaded "****" at the beginning of one of the | |
| paragraphs. | |
| "The paddle **** down a third time, again, slightly lower, but | |
| still overlapping." I inserted the word, "came," but I don't | |
| see how the censor wouldn't allow that word. Of course so many | |
| other words could have been meant. "flashed," "dropped," and | |
| etc. But nothing that I would have censored came to | |
| mind.[/quote] | |
| How about | |
| "c‍‍r‍a‍c‍k‍e‍d"? | |
| (Cr‍a‍c‍k‍e‍d is one of the words | |
| that gets replaced with ****. Go figure.) ??? | |
| #Post#: 16354-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: Jack Date: December 11, 2019, 5:06 pm | |
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| I just wanted to say that chapter 12 is going to be posting | |
| late. My mom had some storm damage to her house, and I've had | |
| to spend a lot of time with the insurance adjuster and | |
| contractor this week. The nice thing is, since we're having to | |
| get this stuff done, I'm getting her to do some other repairs | |
| that have been needing to be done for a while, but that she | |
| didn't want to disturb her household to do. | |
| I should have a lot of free time tomorrow (especially since | |
| Zeke, Jeremy, and Chance are through with their finals now), so | |
| I hope to get caught back up soon. | |
| Thanks for your patience. | |
| For reference, this series is only scheduled for 24 chapters | |
| right now, so there was a bit of leeway in it anyway. | |
| #Post#: 16371-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: David M. Katz Date: December 12, 2019, 3:29 pm | |
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| [quote author=Jack link=topic=1593.msg16354#msg16354 | |
| date=1576105589] | |
| I just wanted to say that chapter 12 is going to be posting | |
| late. | |
| [/quote] | |
| :P ;D So . . . you're just going to leave the boys standing on | |
| a bridge and freezing? | |
| ======== | |
| This is so far an EXCELLENT series despite my agitation at how | |
| Bailey is being treated. Definitely shows a lot of thought and | |
| hard work. | |
| #Post#: 16372-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: Jack Date: December 12, 2019, 4:50 pm | |
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| [quote author=David M. Katz link=topic=1593.msg16371#msg16371 | |
| date=1576186184] | |
| Definitely shows a lot of thought and hard work. | |
| [/quote] | |
| Thanks, while I delayed the actual writing too long, I've been | |
| working on this since last December with input and feedback from | |
| several people, especially Wil and Adric. | |
| #Post#: 16410-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: Jack Date: December 15, 2019, 4:18 pm | |
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| I want to apologize for missing another chapter last night. | |
| While I have been very busy with the Christmas stuff, that's not | |
| what happened this time. | |
| The simple truth is that I've had a rough outline planned for | |
| this series for a while now. However, when I came to chapter | |
| 14, it just didn't work for me. I tried to write it a couple of | |
| times, but just couldn't get past it. I finally thought about | |
| Bailey's character and about this chapter, and I came up with | |
| another approach. Chapter 14 will appear tonight, and I hope | |
| Chapter 15 will be on time tomorrow. I hope the change works | |
| well for everyone (and we can talk about what the change | |
| actually was after the series if finished - if anyone is | |
| interested). | |
| #Post#: 16415-------------------------------------------------- | |
| Re: Author's Forward - A Word About 'It Happened One Christmas' | |
| By: db105 Date: December 15, 2019, 6:52 pm | |
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| Yes, I'm certainly curious at what change you made and why your | |
| original plan didn't work well. Thanks for writing. | |
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